Asttle Narrative Writing - Witches at School

Teacher Note - ‘UNASSISTED’ ASTTLE WRITING
The children write for a total of 40 minutes. Within that timeframe they have to plan their writing (a brainstorm) write, edit and re-craft their work. They are not allowed to use dictionaries or word cards. The students completed their writing on paper but have typed it out for their blogs.

24/11/21

WALT write a creative narrative story! 

Once upon a time there was a witch at school the witch was learning a lot then suddenly she heard a whisper but no one there she looked out the window the playground had vanished. She thought it was a ghost but it wasn't she turned around and a knight was there the witch closed her eyes then opened them the knight had vanished now a class room was missing. Then the witch looked out the window the knight had a wand. He was making everything vanish but the witch still heard the whisper it was in class it was a ghost. The witch picked up her wand and put a spell on the class so everything on the ground will turn invisible . But everything in the air will turn visible the witch found the ghost she put a spell on the ghost and the knight. The spell made them learn and clean up the mess they made.

Thank-you Whaea Seroya

 

My persuasive writing plan

 WALT plan our persuasive writing on a jam board.

My Lockdown Bubble

 WALT share details about our ‘Lockdown Bubble’

Learning from home covid 19. Here is my lockdown bubble writing.

Chapter one buying the land

7/6/21

Once upon a time in 1985 there was two people that owned 70 hectares of land.  There was an abandoned farm that I was thinking about buying. The land was $29,000 dollars and I have $79,000 dollars.  Guess what? I bought it.  

I opened a big shed and found  everything I needed.  In the shed there was fencing gear, a John Deere 8970, a Ford 4100, 399 Massey Fergason. 

 

First Draft - Mahuika Show

28.5.21

We are writing about our experience at the Mahuika Show. 

Yesterday we left school to go to a excellent show.

In the beginning there were two sisters called Kahu and Sissy. They were out in the garden doing  jobs with Nan. Kahu was complaining that sissy  wasn't doing  jobs. Kahu and sissy found a magic kete and the last buring finger nail of mahuika came out of the kete potiki turned Nan to coal kahu and sissy had to save Nan. They followed potiki to the under would to mahuika on the way pukeko kidnapped potiki and took potiki  to mahuika because mahuika put a curse on pukekos beak because pukeko was being bad.

Next steps

• Re read each sentence - does it look right? does it make sense?
• Full stops and capital letters
• Correct your spelling errors

Final Draft - Descriptive Writing - My Mum

 WALT to write a description of our mum using precise words to create an image in our readers minds.

I’m going to introduce my Mum Brenda, she has sparkling blue eyes and likes to wear dresses. She  is tallish. We go walking  on the farm She absolutely  loves coffee. I help her  do  gardening. I help her clean the house. Mum likes to read to me. We bake  delicious banana chocolate chip muffins. Mum takes us to swimming and soccer training. We like to go to McDonalds  together.

Mum likes to watch  Country Calendar and aXe Men. Mum likes to come home after a busy day at work She cooks delicious dinners that I enjoy.  Mum takes me to nans house for afternoon tea .Then we go home. she lights the fire and we  sit by the fire and watch Outback Truckers and The chaser. mum screams  in delight when the chaser wins. She gets a little mad when me and Cameron fight but I still love my Mum even when she is mad.

The Great Reading Adventure

We are learning to write a moment in time about our class assembly, 'The Great Reading Adventure'.

Finally the day arrived, the great reading adventure, I was a bit shy but I got up on stage . When I  started to talk then I felt a bit better. The crowd went silent, the music came on and Jesse looked so sparkly I could barely  look at him. He  walked down the aisle. When that part finished the BFG music came on. I went  on stage and the crowd went silent when I did my part the stomping music came on the other giants were coming. Then I went and sit down and watched Maui and the sun then it was non-fiction, then the fairy tails, then Te Manga and te tinana did the duffy song. When we did the Duffy song butterflies were bombing in a pool in my tummy.

Tsunami Evacuation

We wrote a recount about our evacuation experience. 

Last Friday the whole school went up a hill because there was a tsunami warning. When I was walking up the hill I felt worried  and anxious at the same time. After when we got back to school my mum picked me and Cameron up we all went  up up nana and poppas tank hill. I wanted to go on my chromebook but I left it at school after we had enough on the hill we came to get my chromebook. I went back to my nanas and my dad was there so we helped poppa on his truck. When we were helping my poppa  I went up the hill and I rolled down the hill in the gorse then I went back to the house and got the binoculars. 

We looked at the beach it was brown and there was big waves me and dad went home to get our barbecue and we had a sausage for afternoon tea then we went out for dinner at Fresh and Tasty We had ten snapper and four scoops of chips it as delicious. Me and Cameron had a sprite mum had water poppa had a beer dad had a coca cola.  

Tractor Trek - Big Feelings

We wrote a recount about our Tractor Trek experience. WALT add details to our writing and edit carefully

Last Friday lots of big tractors came to Paparore  School. There were Massey Ferguson and John Deeres There was a Ford and a Hummer H1 after looking at the tractors, everyone went  into the hall and a lady called cat was talking about Feelings when it Finished the School had assembly and then we left to go home and the tractors went past my house. I loved all the Tractors.